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Proofreading (and editing)
« on: June 12, 2016, 07:18:09 PM »

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  A thread about English (英文) proofreading (and editing).
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Proofreading (and editing) of 'Impression after reading a short story'
« Reply #1 on: June 12, 2016, 08:14:03 PM »
 

Impression after reading a short story

By Leung

The original (in black) and the proofreading and editing (in blue):

"Impression after reading a short story

As we know, human beings are a kind of animal with complicated feelings and relationships. For example, we are cheerful when our parents encourage us, and we will be upset, if we are in collision with our closest friends; and we will be loved by others, if we also love them. Talking about love, I am impressed with a short story -- 'The Christmas Presents', which was written by an American writer (O.Henry). There is a story of a couple who fall in love with each other in New York. This short novel tells what are this poor couple presents, and how they earn cash to buy something they want. In the fiction, they are not wealthy, but they have a priceless love.
Before the day of Christmas, they wanted to give a present each other for affection and celebration. However, it is not easy for the poor to show love generously. At last, they found out methods to obtain money for these significant gifts. The wife in the novel earned twenty dollars to buy a chain by selling her own brown long hair to barbershop, and the husband got a comb for his wife by selling a watch, which belonged to his father and his grandfather, but it is his watch now.
In the end of story, it is so amazing that they got special gifts with their own favorite thing at the same time on the very day. Perhaps, the comb is the best Christmas present for the wife, and the chain is the same to the husband. Because they would give what is precious for showing how deep is their love, even if they have nothing. What a touching story about true love!
Before reading this short story, I didn't know what is true love on earth. 
When having finished 'The Christmas Present', I already have some views. First of all, whether you are rich or poor, healthy or unhealthy, good-looking or bad-looking, you will be loved by someone who loves you indeed without leaving alone. Secondly, there is no limitation on age and something else, if you find who you actually love. Finally, true love is priceless, which is not measured or exchanged for something visible, which is a spiritual value, which is a unique emotion between two people.
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"Impression After Reading a Short Story

As we know, human beings are a kind of animal with complicated feelings and relationships. For example, we are cheerful when our parents encourage us, and we will be upset if we and closest friends are in collision, and we will be loved by others if we also love them. Talking about love, I am impressed with a short story, the Christmas Presents, which was written by a American writer, O.Henry. There is a story of a couple who fall in love with each other in New York. This short novel tell what are this poor couple presents, and how they gain cash to buy something they want. In the fiction, they are not wealthy, they have priceless love.
Before the day of Christmas, they wanted to give a present each other for affection and celebration. However, it is not easy for the poor to show love generously.  At last, they found out methods to obtain money for these significant gifts.The wife in the novel earned twenty dollars to buy a chain by selling her own brown long hair to barbershop, and the husband got a comb for his lover by selling a watch, which was belong to  his father's and grandfather's, but it is his watch now . In the end of story, it is so amazing that they got special gifts with their own favorite thing at the same time on the very day. Perhaps, the comb is the best Christmas present for the wife, and the chain is the same to the husband. Because,they would do give what is precious for showing how loving deeply even if they have nothing. What a moving story about true love!
Before reading this short story,I don't know what is true love on earth.  When having finished The Christmas Present, I have some views. First of all, whether you are rich or poor, healthy or unhealthy, good-looking or bad-looking, you will be loved by someone who love you indeed without leaving alone. Secondly, there is no limitation between sexuality, age and something else, if you find whom you actually like. Finally, true love is priceless, which is not measured or changed for something visible, which is spiritual values, which is unique emotion between two people.

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